04-23-2021, 11:46 PM
(04-23-2021, 06:09 PM)Steppingfeet Wrote: First and foremost I wanted to use the program as a platform to explore Suzanna's ongoing unfolding.
Of course, it's your show, I'm just a vicious critic with an axe to grind, but having said that: my personal preference would be for less emphasis on transient material in the balance of things. In this case, then, the "I like, I dislike the legal profession" could have been summarized and a deeper description of the erotic energy could have been explored. For me, just me, it had a feeling of too much bread and not enough tofu, if you will. The most satisfying parts of a story, I would aver, are the pivots of transformation along with the denouement. I would like to hear more about how the feeling of living life changed before and after this gateway was discovered. For instance, does she experience her friends (such as thou) any differently now as compared to before? Has it enriched casual intimacy in the sense that she experiences self differently in this context?