12-09-2017, 12:12 PM
5-7-5 is the standard way of writing it, but its okay if its less syllables. Sometimes 17 syllables makes the haiku unnecessarily drawn out.
As long as it is the simplicity of the relationship of 2 entities. Generally a cutting phrase is added, which gives the reader a sense of action or unexpectedness about that moment.
Frozen pond
An Oak leaf
half in
half out
This haiku does not follow the 5-7-5 (in english), nor the 3 line format, but it does what haikus are awesome for: It conveys (to me) a feeling and an imaginative picture. The entities are a frozen pond and an Oak leaf. Their relationship is that the fallen oak leaf 'half in, half out' atop the frozen pond.
moonlit snail trails
on the garden Buddha
Also doesnt adhere to the characteristics of general haiku, but it still conveys a picture and a feeling within one moment
As long as it is the simplicity of the relationship of 2 entities. Generally a cutting phrase is added, which gives the reader a sense of action or unexpectedness about that moment.
Frozen pond
An Oak leaf
half in
half out
This haiku does not follow the 5-7-5 (in english), nor the 3 line format, but it does what haikus are awesome for: It conveys (to me) a feeling and an imaginative picture. The entities are a frozen pond and an Oak leaf. Their relationship is that the fallen oak leaf 'half in, half out' atop the frozen pond.
moonlit snail trails
on the garden Buddha
Also doesnt adhere to the characteristics of general haiku, but it still conveys a picture and a feeling within one moment